Themes are found anywhere and everywhere, whether from a book, play or in real life. Throughout The Tempest so far, there have also been many themes. The most prominent of which is imprisonment and freedom. Many of the characters have dealt with at least one of the two, and I have, and continue, to experience freedom, but what would I want in imprisonment? And how do I really want to feel, or do feel about freedom?
The Question is: “If you were imprisoned, and had only two things or people you could see outside your cell window, what would you like there to be?”. My answer to this is simply be nothing. If I were stuck in a cell, and outside saw a lush wide open field, I would instantly crave being there. This is the same as someone who is craving food but forgot a lunch and every-one else around you was eating. Many prisoners of the now shut-down prison of Alcatraz said that it wasn’t the fact that they were in a prison that tormented them, but the fact that they could see civilization. They could see freedom from outside their windows. They could imagine it all, but they would never again be a part of the life they used to know. (Tricolon) I am thankful to not be imprisoned, and am able to experience all of the joys and experiences that come from life. Sometimes I wonder why so many people of our world simply throw it away.
The other part of the theme also interests me, freedom. We are asked to write an ending to “I would like to be as free as…”. My answer to this question is, I would like to be as free as I am. In my thirteen years of life I feel that I have never been confined to one space, I have never been told just to sit and wait, and I have never been limited mentally. (Tricolon) However I have always thought and created to my hearts content, and have always had partial or complete input in what I can or would do next. Unfortunately many people could not say the same as I just have. Slaves are forced to do what their master tells them, and nothing else. Handicapped people have limitations even in everyday life. I am thankful to have all of my abilities and thankful to be able to simply be me, without anything or anyone speaking against that.
I had know idea two simple themes from a play written over three-hundred and fifty years ago could have such meaning to life today in 2009. If we were all characters in a play of any genre, I am sure that one of themes would be imprisonment and freedom.
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Graphic Organiser:
Intro:
The Tempest has many themes, freedom and imprisonment. The two questions
1st Body:
SD: I wouldn't want to see anything at all
CM's: examples, lush field, food
SD: Alcatraz prisoners
CM's: not being able to live in civilization, but see it everyday tormented many of them
2nd Body:
SD: free as I am
CM's: I have always done things without imprisonment
SD: Others are not so lucky
CM's: Handicapped people, Slaves
Conclusion:
No idea that two themes could affect us so much
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2 comments:
Eleanor,
You did an excellent job in your essay approaching the subjects of the paragraphs and that is very admirable. There are two things though that I would like to suggest to you. The first one is to make the 1st sentence in your opening paragraph more catchy. I think that if it's more catchy you paper will flow better. Also, I would like you to reread the opening paragraph. To you it may make sense, but to the reader it may be a bit confussing. I think that if you clarify some of your sentences you will be in good shape. Nice job Eleanor!
- Hannah
Eleanor,
As always your stucture is near perfect and I like the parrellism in the first supporting detail of the essay. In the intro however you could word things differently. In the second sentence you write "would be" which makes you sound unsure or mabye its a hypothetical statement. If you just say "is" instead it will be much stronger, whenever possible make your verbs difinate. You also, in the following sentence, write "gone through" when you can't really go through freedom or imprisonment in this context. I'll bet you meant something akin to "dealt with". I also couldn't help but notice the concluding sentence to the first body paragraph doesn't really fit with the rest of the paragraph; I know that your talking about going to prison and what you give up with that sentence but the paragraph is what You Need when imprisoned. Try leading into the next paragraph. A few whole but an overall good essay.
Zack
If I sound like I'm nitpicking I'm sorry but that's all I can find to comment on.
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