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Zack!
So far you have done a GREAT job. (try to get the rest of your essay up as soon as your internet works again)I like your topic sentence, it goes straight to the point, and you don't have any uneccessary words to weigh it down. I can only find one thing in this paragraph that I find to be wrong, and it's a bit picky because I couldn't find anything else. You say "Ariel's old master Sycorax" and usually when it's a female in control you would say mistress not master. Apart from that small little thing, you have one SWEET essay.
~Eleanor
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