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3 comments:
Zach,
You always do a great job in explaining yourself in every paragraph you do. One thing that I was confused about was the last sentence of the opening paragraph, I don't completely understand it. You're paragraphs are also very wordy, that's not necessarily a bad thing but you have a lot to say and your sentences are very long.
~Olivia
zach,
Nice job, you opening paragraph was amazing and I immediately hooked. I agree with olivia as well. I was pretty confussed about the last sentence in the opening paragraph. Also, you might want to re-read the closing paragraph, i found a mechanical error that you can fix easily. Other than that, I enjoyed reading your essay!
- Hannah
Zack!!
Your essay was great, it flowed easily from one paragraph to the next, and was intelligently written. Although, like Olivia, i noticed that your paragraphs tend to have long sentances including words that arn't really needed. However, apart from that you did great!!
~Eleanor~
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